by TITA Sep 12, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
secret love
I WANT YOU TO BE WITH ME FOR MORE THAT A FRIEND I HAVE LIKE U SINCE I MEET U AND MORE I TALK TO U I MY FEELS GET BIGGER I WANT TO TELL U BUT THE FEAR OF A REJECT WILL HURT ME!X I WANT TO BE WITH U |
Okay, I want to help you out on a couple of things. Don't put it in caps like I said before and use punctuation, otherwise its a run on sentence that is of no interest to the reader. Also, in this piece "u" should be "you". Your grammar is awful here, if English is not your number one language than I suggest you take time to look over your poetry before posting something that makes absolutely no sense to the reader. I don't mean to sound harsh, but I couldn't even read it, if you want others to look at it and want to grow as a poet, please take my advice, trust me, you will be better off. |