This poem is great, really describes what you are feeling.

"Recovering from too many nights out
Drinking to forget, smoking to erase
Destruction keeps me warm at night,
Not like anyone I know, they're just for show."

Perfecly worded, good job. I could tell you wrote this straight from your heart. Keep writing, always and forever....

Amazing poem :) People could relate to this in so many ways

"Just because it was last year
Doesn't mean it has lost meaning;
And I guess that's the same for you,
Unreturned confessions, obsessions."

for me I compleatly relate to this verse espeshily, it makes me think of my disasterous relationship with my prom date last year. But he just didn't give anything to the relationship, So I ended it before it began.

Put my feelings on paper :) Love it :)

5/5

I think this is soo far one of ur best poems that i have read 5/5 :):):)

"Just because it was last year
Doesn't mean it has lost meaning;
And I guess that's the same for you,
Unreturned confessions, obsessions."

-- Beautiful. I love the word choice, once again. Word selection is important when writing, as you know, and yours selection is great.

"My cutting room floor is getting full.
Everything fits somewhere, but where?
No one will tell me, no one knows,
Even if they did, they aren't new, they aren't you."

-- Ah. This is nice. It's calm, but at the same time, gets your point across perfectly. I love the first two lines, specifically. I feel as though they hold a wonderful amount of signicance to life.

"Recovering from too many nights out
Drinking to forget, smoking to erase
Destruction keeps me warm at night,
Not like anyone I know, they're just for show."

-- "Destruction keeps me warm at night," -- this line is gorgeous. I like, what I feel as though, I think it means. You're so used to being destructive and acting a certain way, that it's normal for you, and it's what keeps you relaxed.

"I could slip a subliminal reference here,
You won't find it, you never tried looking.
Now I think that it's okay for once
I've got the city lights in my eyes, a demise."

-- This is good. I feel as though it ended sort of abruptly, if you will. It sounds like it could still go on in a way. No matter -- it's still a good ending. Your word choice, again, is stunning. Beautiful job. =]

Five out of five. [5/5]

``Briana

This is superb it is so well thought out I love the flow in this piece I had to read it a couple of times at first stanzas 1 and 2 and stanzas 3 and 4 didn’t seem to fit together but after reading again it made a lot more sense and I suddenly realised just how good this poem is.

"Unreturned confessions, obsessions."
- Love this line. It just rolls right off the readers tongue.

"My cutting room floor is getting full.
Everything fits somewhere, but where?"
- My favorite lines in the entire piece. So simple, yet so magnificent.

"Destruction keeps me warm at night,"
- This line speaks volumes. And I'm sure there are many who can relate.

"I could slip a subliminal reference here,"
- Love your usage of subliminal.

I do feel the end was rather abrupt. But other than that, this was a quite enjoyable piece. Nicely done. (:

5.5
Take care,
Stephanie

Just because it was last year
Doesn't mean it has lost meaning;
And I guess that's the same for you,
Unreturned confessions, obsessions.
--------I think the last lane was a bit off for this stanza. Im not sure though. But I liked how you wrote the three lines, they were very transparent.

My cutting room floor is getting full.
Everything fits somewhere, but where?
No one will tell me, no one knows,
Even if they did, they aren't new, they aren't you.
------I think the word aren’t you didn’t fit in this line. Im sorry maybe im mistaken. But frankly I liked the first three lines, They were too deep and somehow dark plus you could actually feel the peak of this poem.

Recovering from too many nights out
Drinking to forget, smoking to erase
Destruction keeps me warm at night,
Not like anyone I know, they're just for show.
--------This stanza is more than amazing. Everything went together perfectly. The idea, and the descriptions fitted well.

I could slip a subliminal reference here,
You won't find it, you never tried looking.
Now I think that it's okay for once
I've got the city lights in my eyes, demise.
----------A very heartbreaking ending. I could actually feel the sadness in here. Overall it was a transparent short poem of a girl who has a heart that was broken.Good job..5/5

Wow well, I doubt I can follow up on the previous comments, they went really in depth. But, I must say I found this poem very unique.

If I am correct, you basically state in these lines:

"I could slip a subliminal reference here,
You won't find it, you never tried looking."

...The meaning of the poem, that there aren't any hidden messages, and that someone close has some type of trouble?

Nothing really wrong that I can see, I did find it to be blunt at one or two times, but to be honest I doubt anyone would really care.

Great Job, I must say, you really know your poetry. =D

Your rhyming scheme is a very unique one, but it makes this poem what it is.

"Recovering from too many nights out
Drinking to forget, smoking to erase
Destruction keeps me warm at night,
Not like anyone I know, they're just for show."

i love this line, it shows that your in pain and you rely on these things to help you get through it. But also "destruction keeps you warm at night", i assume you mean you enjoy the pain in a way. I too enjoy feeling pain over feeling nothing at all, it reminds us we are alive.

"I could slip a subliminal reference here,
You won't find it, you never tried looking."

i love this line, it really says something about you and this story the poem tells. You know the person all too well and you know your words would be wasted because they are too ignorant to look for it.

this is a very good piece.

overall i give it a 5/5

keep up the great work.
god bless
-chris

Amazing poem! emotion, flow, creativity, and diction was on the dot! the detail you put in each line blew me away. the story behind this poem is wonderful...you should write stories....i know you have the talent...

keep it ip..
have i mentioned you are a very tanleted poet?
well yeah i have! and i'll say it again! and again!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

Unreturned confessions, obsessions.

^^ way to many big words in one sentence, especially when the entire poem isn't filled with that kind of language.

I've read a lot of your other poetry as well, and it seems to me as if you're writing about the same thing over and over. I could be wrong, but I think it would be cool if you wrote about something else than drinking alcohol to forget and so on.

I'll give you a 4. It was good.

-- Alexandra S