Wow, I am truly left breathless by this poem, everything about it had me speechless!

"Trees quiver where shadows lean,
a tiny sliver of the moon is seen
By the glimpse of the silent lake,
care not to stir, or slightly wake"

The descriptions here are so vivid, and you definetly gave the reader a good visual. I think this stanza is absolutely flawless, and really catches the readers eye.

Good job, this poem is amazing, and you wrote it very well. You have some awesome talent there, so keep writing, always and forever...

The imagery really stands out with subtle unforced rhymes turning romantic
well done

Wow this poem is truely beautiful =] You should encourage more people toread it, it deserves a lot more reviews!
Your choice of wording captured the poem perfectly, the rhyming was spot on and just everything about the poem was perfect.
Your a very talented writter keep it up! ^^

Ok this poem has all sort of emotions in it. it can go in all categories! i like it. different...Xp
Great job. the rhyming is awsome! keep writting you have talent!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

It's an interesting combination of ideas .. I like the whole spooky halloween love thing , its awesome . The flow is greatt , and everything else is just fantastic really .. 5/5 .

Well, I think it's safe to say that this stanza: "Trees quiver where shadows lean,
a tiny sliver of the moon is seen
By the glimpse of the silent lake,
care not to stir, or slightly wake"

...was just pure brilliant. Definitely my favorite part of the poem. I thought it was overall great. A few syllable errors if you were going for a7-8 syllables on four lines, but I don't think it matters. This was very well done. The imagery (I know it sounds cliche on this site) was fantastic. I'm being completely honest. Good job.

Aw this was cool. I didn't find it to be like a cliche so there's a plus! The last stanza was my favorite I thought it sumed it up nicely and your word choice was fantastic! Here are some errors I found:
"The touch of your hand made me shiver,
reassuring me, you were oh, so clever"
I didn't think shiver and clever sounded right together, they weren't horrible but I also try to give some suggestions
Also:
"But you know I was always keen,
not to fall too hard on Halloween"
I think that in your mind this must be some very cute memory but for the reader the word halloween doesn't make much sense or atleast to me.
Overall I really liked this poem. It was easy to read and the flow was flawless!!
5/5

(: The first stanza was my absolute favorite.
Flawless cadence and imagery there. At first I thrown off by the "Halloween," but the second time I read it through, the eerie vibe of the poem stood out to me more, and it all fit together. Overall, I think this is a well written and unique piece. Refreshing read. ***

Very nice. Loved it, although I didn't really get the idea as I read the middle, but as I reached the end, I understood. Really nice use of imagery, I was able to picture the glistening lake and a beautiful night sky with the moon and stars. It's a wonderful picture to go with this. The last two lines were a great ending. Great work!

Pretty good!

i really enjoyed the stanza:

The rustle of the leaves are all that sound,
but chance of heartbreaks may resound
Only your image and eyes that glisten,
the simple sound of your voice I listen.

this seems very heartfelt for someone you fell for on halloween, the only thing i can say is maybe to develop it more and make me feel the love you felt for each other. make it longer? more description? whatever you choose.
overall an 8/10
pretty good in my opinion.

keep up the good work,
god bless.
-chris.

Incredible ryme... wow... amazing

great imagery, i love it!

not many misc. poems get to me, but you've definitly hit home lol :]

5/5

Well, i have to admit you're really good at rhyming words. I'm not really a rhyme person coz some poems that have rhyming words don't make much sense. Well yours has sense and all the rhyming words sounds good. Well done. Flow was excellent too, everything was smooth from start to finish.

"Trees quiver where shadows lean,
a tiny sliver of the moon is seen
By the glimpse of the silent lake,
care not to stir, or slightly wake"
`This imagery is amazing. The words are fabulous. I felt like I was standing in your shoes. Amazingly written.

"A place where there's no harm,
here is where you're my charm
nothing but the endearing silence,
stars gleam vivid by mere brilliance"
`Word choice, again. Wow am I ever impressed. Such beautiful lines here. It's adorable. :]

"The touch of your hand made me shiver,
reassuring me, you were oh, so clever
But you know I was always keen,
not to fall too hard on Halloween"
`Lol for some reason I really liked the last two lines of this stanza.. it was well unique it's own way which attracted me as a reader, and made me say woow.

"Protection as my guardian angel,
but just a weak heart left to dangle"
`Woowness. Girl, you have your way with words.. and I can clearly see that. The rhyme and flow of the poem have swept me off my feet. This poem is very well written.. and the wording just keeps getting better!

"The rustle of the leaves are all that sound,
but chance of heartbreaks may resound
Only your image and eyes that glisten,
the simple sound of your voice I listen."
`Totally amazingly written. I am speechless.

Overall, a great write. :] Well done. 5/5

I really liked this, there were some stanza's that could have been removed and it wouldn't have made a difference.

The promise of the moon and stars,
we were just reliving these memoirs

That is by far one of my favorite lines that I have read in a very long time. I really liked that, the way that you put the rythme into that. It was very well thought out and executed.

But you know I was always keen,
not to fall too hard on Halloween

that specifically is something that I wasn't overly crazy about and felt it really didn't belong with the rest of them.

Honestly, this is a really great poem and I'm glad that I got a chance to get to read it. Truly a wonderful piece.

Keep writing and keep your chin up.

5/5

Such a wonderful write, 5/5. Em