One is A Lonely Number.

by Vanessa   Sep 28, 2008


The porch lights grow brighter as the water finally starts drying from my eyes. And its finally dawning on me that I still have all night to think about the words you said and how much they meant. You told me remember this please just remember this.

So I'll close my eyes tonight and don't bother to wake me because I have set my alarm for bright and early, so I can catch you before you bus arrives to carry you far away. And I will tell you how you mean the world to me and if you leave me now you'll always be in my heart because your there to stay.

The stars feel lonely tonight without you here. this dreaded loneliness has become my worst fear. the feeling of happiness I have forgotten. There are no sounds other then your yelling and slamming door, but when it all dies down I'll beg for more. because I miss your voice, but in the end I will have to remember I always had a choice.

Now the coffee cups are building up on my bed side, filled with emptiness. My eyes are fluttering trying to fight this grogginess. your words are echoing in my head and just wont let me put this day to bed.

So I'll close my eyes tonight and don't bother to wake me because I have set my alarm for bright and early, so I can catch you before you bus arrives to carry you far away. And I will tell you how you mean the world to me and if you leave me now you'll always be in my heart because your there to stay.

written by me along with my other ones.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Kimberley

    Awww.... that was really good. i loved the last four lines. 10/5 ~KM~

  • 15 years ago

    by cudntfindgudsn

    Great poem. nice flow. sounded really nice.

    its great, write more.

    =]

    mike

  • 15 years ago

    by CalGirl

    Omg, i luv this stanza:

    "The stars feel lonely tonight without you here. this dreaded loneliness has become my worst fear. the feeling of happiness I have forgotten. There are no sounds other then your yelling and slamming door, but when it all dies down I'll beg for more. because I miss your voice, but in the end I will have to remember I always had a choice."

    i totally remember when i used to feel that way. it was hard. REALLY hard. you portrayed this feeling really well in your poem. nice flow, it sounded really rhythmical.

    great poem, keep it up!

    ~Sophie~

  • 15 years ago

    by SIMPLY ME

    Good job.....5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "The porch lights grow brighter as the water finally starts drying from my eyes."

    I love this beginning, and also how you told a story..

    "So I'll close my eyes tonight and dont"

    "dont" should be "don't".

    "The stars feel lonely tonight without you here. this dreaded loneliness has become my worse fear."

    I love that first line, wording so wonderfully.
    "worse" should be "worst".

    "Now the coffee cups are building up on my bed side, filled with emptiness. My eyes are fluttering trying to fight this grogginess. your words are echoing in my head and just wont let me put this day to bed."

    "wont" should be "won't".

    But otherwise than that, this was my favorite part^your words told such a story, and you expressed so much of how you want him to stay, and how you really feel. Nice job, keep writing, always and forever...

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