Emotion

Crying and laughing at the same time.
Gasping, struggling to catch my breath
only for you to steal it away again.
Happy, sad this is just too much.
I'd add a ; after sad .

Confused emotions swirl inside
tidal waves crashing and pounding me.
Raw emotion tiring me out.
Leaving me open, vulnerable.
This is a really good stanza , other than the second line . I think it can be rewritten .

Worn and torn, by mixed signals
that you always throw my way.

Short , but lots of emotion put into it at the same time . Decent . 5/5

I really enjoyed this piece.

It was relatively short yet full of so many conflicting emotions and filled with so much depth, while the imagery throughout is beautiful and creates beautiful pictures for me as the reader.

I found the flow to be good throughout, just rolled right off my tounge.

"Worn and torn, by mixed signals
that you always throw my way. "

^^ I frikken LOVE those closing lines, so many people will be able to relate to that and it makes for a powerful ending to the piece.

I think this is beautifully written.

Ok, I take it back. This is your best poem that I read. This is an amazing write.

You were very descriptive with your words. You choose a subject and stuck with it. You really did a great job on this poem and I feel it's definitely your best work to date.

5/5

Change nothing!

Very amazing write! I loved it! The flow and word usage amazed me... and the way it was written, spectacular. I was trapped by how poetic this poem was. Very great job on this poem! 5/5 and it's more than deserving...

This is a perfect description of being in love
in a very original style