I remember

by MERCY is never shown   Oct 20, 2008


I lay here awake all night
with thoughts of you
i only wish you would tell me
just what i should do
i remember sitting with you
in the rain
i remember you brushing
the hair from my face
i remember laying on a couch with you
"watching" a movie
i remember your gentle kiss
everything about you
that i used to love
now haunts
my every waking moment
dreams are no longer an escape
now i see you everyday
in the people that pass by
regret tears at my heart
and rips through my soul
not regret for what we did
but what i didn't do
when i had the chance
maybe then you'd still be here
maybe then i wouldn't cry myself to sleep
if only i didn't remember
. . . . .
but i never want to forget

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  • 13 years ago

    by A Poets Handwriting aka ALISHA

    I agree with DarkCrystalbtrfy (above).. this poem has such a simplicity about it, yet there is so much emotion expressed.

    I absolutely love the powerful ending:

    "If only I didn't remember
    but I never want to forget"

    I also disagree with AnCi... the poem doesnt need to rhyme its perfectly fine as it is.

    Well done. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by DarkCrystalbtrfy

    Nice I like the word play here as well as the style. I think you could correct a bit on the capatilization. My favorite lines were:
    i remember sitting with you
    in the rain
    i remember you brushing
    the hair from my face

    Its so simple and yet it has so much emotion put into it.
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by SolemnWish

    I agree with Karl. I am a teenager lol and I have been through this.
    I do the movie thing lol
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Well I think everybody who is a teenager or ever was a teenager can relate to this piece. Not just the love part and losing it, but for me the "watching" a movie part hahaha I thought I was only one who did that shit haha great work 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Ken

    This i s an amazing poem but I would have to disagree with AnCi about the rhyming, it does not have to rhyme all the way as long a you can make good transitions between when rhyming and not rhyming it should always turn out good.

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