This poem reminds me of something that I would say to my Boy friend. 4th line of the 2nd stanza "my" should be "may" hmm, i think. My just doesnt sound right there. Other then that it is a great poem and gives good advice. 5/5

WOW i feel as though everyone has to say this to their closest friends once in awhile and it was really great, i loved your word usage the most.

One of the many things I can't do, I can't put something anything I want into my mind and write a poem, Ive tried over and over again but then again i dont know if this was something you wanted to write or it was based on emotions ethier way 5/5 for that aspect.

Favorite Stanza~Not even a stanza, I like short meaningful Lines,

Yes, youth is wasted on the young
Far too often this sad song is sung

I see so many children being penialized and punished for so many things and there lives ruined from a very early age, Never thought about this going into a poem. 5/5

Ryhming~ Nice Simple Perfect, Just how I like it.With the occasional acutal word that requires some intelect to understand then put into ryhme with another word of the same sort, The last Stanza I was exspect more of a BOOM everlasting affect though, 4/5

Flow~ Flawless, Enough said. 5/5

And I didnt know Err was a word unless it was misspelled

4.8/5 = 5

A very well done piece soothes the ache i have for today's youth. Full of wisdom and filled with good virtues in it. Very inspiring and expressed a lot about you too. Good Job. really.

I wasn't wild about the first two lines, I think it was the rythem. However the rest flowed like a waterfall and you're amazing at rhyming. They're medium words to rhyme but in the rest of your words it pulled them up from simple language to lovely.

The first two lines of the second stanza were my favorite, because you managed to fit what would normally take several lines or thoughts and put it together so that it was elequant and added muchly to the piece.

Nearly flawless write, the flow and choice of words were extremely done well. I don't really think that there's anything I would change if this was my poem. I thought you did a great job, and you kept a constant rhythm. This is a true friendship poem, great work. 5/5.

Oh now this is beautiful, such a poem should inspire any youth. The rhyming scheme is flawless and the flow is perfect and easy to follow =] Again a really great write this poem is thoughtful and touching

I really liked the word usage in this poem. It flowed nicely as well... But the way you dedicated it to your nephew IN the poem... that was unique and very nice. 5/5 from me :P

Very buetiful poem, i like the advice you left him very inspirational poem 5/5

Thank you

Awe . This is really cute .. I hope Zack felt very lucky .

Great message of inspiration. You know the young ones have a problem thinking of consequences, their frontal lobes aren't fully developed yet. We can hope, they don't do too much they will regret until the executive judgement kicks in! Nice job on the poem!

"Though few may follow the word to the letter"
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Awesome lines here. It kept me thinking actually of how many times one tends to overlook the power of "words".

What I loved most is the last stanza. I have heard people using "grains", but "sands of time "is totally something- vast and unpredictable. And the message in the last two lines has been penned down beautifully.

Oh, this was so beautiful! I loved the words that you used; they were so powerful. It was honest and I can see that you really care for your great-great-nephew. He's lucky to have somebody like you in his life. :)

I thought this was sweet. The advice is great also. I liked it! Great!

You are talented. I enjoy reading reading so much your poems. It always left me thinking...
Life is filled with struggles , yet at times most can be overcome easily. Very strong message. It merits 5/5. i like it, kel