Rise And Walk Those Steps

by Italian Stallion   Nov 13, 2008


Weeping now, I don't know what's begun.
Life was taken away from us,
A friend, lover, and a daughter.
Memories always running through our minds.

Sorrow's what we all give,
That's not what she would have intended.
Hearts now beating like a drum,
Wipe those tears away.

Stairs to heaven in front of our eyes
Leading toward our loved one.
Rise and walk those steps,
To release the sorrowness within.

© Copyright 2008 By: Italian Stallion

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  • 15 years ago

    by DarkCrystalbtrfy

    The imadgry is amazing. I could imagine that I was in front of heaven and its gates staring upwards. Once again I like your use of proes.

    Well Written
    Darkcrystalbtrfy

  • 15 years ago

    by Miu

    I so adore this poem. It was ah so beautiful and powerful. With this like " Wipe those tears away." Could almost feel like I had tears on my face. That's just incredible! Like you are taking the poem reader in the depths of emotions of the grievers, and even thought it didn't ryhme it still flowed great. I liked that
    Overall I love this poem!

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    The mood in this poem changes from the beginning to the end which I thought was excellent. You start it out as something sad, losing someone youre close to and love.. and then realizing they go to heaven in the end .. kind of lightens the poem up a bit. :] Well done. Touching write.. short, but says a lot. Great work. 5/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by Miss Behaving

    Very short and sweet. I love the ending. It makes the poem not seem all that sad. It gives hope =) Only one thing seemed a little off.

    "Leading toward our loved one."

    I think it's meant to be "ones" since you were talking about more than one person that was close. Not sure just thought I would point that out. 5/5 Love it. =)

  • 15 years ago

    by Sourav

    It's a good poem with lot of emotions. Very touching. But you should certainly change the word 'sorrowness'. Because that's not the correct word. Keep writing.