Too Late

by LuvMeAlwayz   Jan 1, 2009


Seems like just yesterday it all happen
Everything fell apart,
Little puzzles came together
But still you broke my heart.

Saying you liked me
Like no one else before,
I saw you with my own eyes
Disappointed, you left my heart sore.

What am I to you? I once asked
A friend and maybe something more,
Why did you gave me hope?
Pieces left missing, fallen again like before

Maybe I gave my heart away... willingly
Maybe I shouldn't let you go... contentedly

I hope you don't but I would regret... I know
But it'll be too late... too late cause you're the one who let me go.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    "Seem like yesterday it all happened"
    Seem = Seems

    REMEMBER: Everything needs to go together. Yesterday = past tense. So, everything must be in past tense (check the rest of the poem for this problem as well);

    Everything falling apart,
    Little puzzles coming together
    But still you broke my heart.

    [Everything FELL apart,
    Little puzzles CAME together
    But you still broke my heart]

    Other than the past/present tense mix ups all you have to take out of the poem/fix in it is the ellipsis' (...) they need taken out. There is NO NEED for them at all.

    Here's a link telling you what they are and when to use them:
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ellipsis

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