Arms of My Angel (shortened)

Strong poem
very well done love it!!

This poem was very good, well written, and a good flow. I like how you started each stanza. It has a lot of good emotion! My favorite stanza...

"With the Hand of my Angel,
Our hands become tangled..
I find scars of what she was before me.."

The last line seems really emotional. I really like it!

All together it was a great poem excellent even.5/5

SP

This style is very original to me I felt the flow before I read the second triplet which blended very nicely for me. I also felt the emotion of touching and being touched beyond the physical realm which of course added to my enjoyment of read this poem

In the Arms of my Angel,
My thoughts become strangled..
And all I see is who I could really be..
^^ very strong introduction. Suggestions though i would put in the correct punctuation. it should have only one period on the second line and "My" shouldn't be capitalized. The last line should only have on period as well the only reason i suggest this is because it makes the poem look neater and more official. Other than that you express the possibilities that arise when an angel holds you you see things differently and innocently just as they appear it's sort of makes me think of through a child's eyes because children see the world without all the corruption and hurt they see things we don't

In the Arms of my Angel,
I see where my noose had dangled..
And what all the pain did to me..
^^Ok now you are discovering more things. You can pin point exactly what hurt you. I think that is powerful. I get this vibe that ((i could be wrong :x)) it is the angel holding you to protect you and help you heal after you see these things i could be way off but thats what i got from this stanza

Through the Tears of my Angel,
I see her thoughts become strangled,
And I see who we're ready to be..
^^wow that first line really made me sad..i picture and think of Angels as sacred and protective creatures to imagine one crying hurts ! I like how you went back to tie in with an earlier stanza

And through the Tears of my Angel,
She Say's that her noose had dangled,
From the Balcony where you met me..
^^again tying back into what was previously said was clever it made each stanza important and have a recognizable purpose in this poem.

With the Hand of my Angel,
Our hands become tangled..
I find scars of what she was before me..
^^ i loved this stanza personally. It gave an Angel the feel of being real because everyone has a past no matter what you become in the future you past is still a part of you you can't change it but you can grow from it powerful message in such compacted lines!

I hold the Heart of my Angel,
It's so scarred and mangled,
At the lightest touch she can barely breathe,
^^ wow...great ending. That was a twist! I thought the angel was going to be the one saving you! I like when ending's aren't predictable it makes your poem unique. It was a heartfelt sad ending but brilliant.

I would just fix the punctuation! 5/5

Simple yet moving.
well done

Int the last stanza I think that you should add a (so) before mangled. It will make it parrallel and will flow easier

The repitition of hands in the fifth stanza makes that part slightly redundant even though you only said it twice

other than that the poem is very powerful, though depressing. Amazing work and don't let my nit-pickiness upset you.