Bleeding Love

First off, thanks for stopping by and commenting on my poem. :)
Now, I can easily relate to this poem, especially seeing as most of what I write is directed towards one person that I've loved for a very long time, but havent been together with for years. So, for me, this poem hit home, and hard! great job!
Hopeless Romantic

It's beginning to crack
Beginning has too many syllables , it don't match the rest of the staza . Try starting .

I can't handle all of this pain
Take out all of , it flows better .

but I feel as if I'm going to die
but I feel like i'm going to die .. Hah shorten it up ! You're the first person I commented on that I have to suggest to take out syllables .

My heart is being stabbed by a 1000 knives
I don't have a suggestion for this line .. Other than to change it .. I really don't like it .

But instead my heart just broke apart
try to avoid the repetition in this stanza .. And somehow get rid of heart .
But instead it's broken , right torn apart .

But I keep bleeding for the rest of forever
for the one that's close to my heart, my beloved
At least now you know that I love you
But too bad, ... I'm your bleeding love
This whole last stanza needs work . The second line needs to be changed completely , with a better rhyming word for love .

But I keep bleeding for the rest of forever
For you're what my nightmares are made of
At least you know how I've felt all along
It's a shame .. That i'm bleeding all your love .

Something like that ? It flows better and the rhymes are a little better too .. And it has no repetition . Haha um , other than those things .. I really like the idea . The only reason I could help you out is because it was easy to get into and understand how you were feeling . Good job , but needs some work . 4/5

This is a very sad and emotional poem, I really enjoyed reading it =] The overall flow of the poem could be changed a little here or there but other than that its a very beautiful piece so I will give it a 5/5

Very good indeed, i especially like many of the rhymes in this poem such as "away" and "disarray"

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D. Johnson.

Wow... I really enjoyed this poem... My favorite part was probably...

"But I keep bleeding for the rest of forever
for the one that's close to my heart, my beloved
At least now you know that I love you
But too bad, ... I'm your bleeding love"

it was very touching... and I love the title!!!... Great pice of work!! 8) 5/5!!