Presidential

Yet another fantastic write from a good poet in my opinion. Excellent work my friend, loved your choice of words along with the rhyme scheme, well done!!! The flow was flawless as well as the structure. Nice puncuation too! Great piece in which much about our country as well as the world is shown through your words which in my opinion is fantastic. Keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe

The emotions are rendered well ... the faith and believe that e have on our politicians ... sometimes I wonder if they are really worth it ... leading us downhill they cherish in glory...

overall a well written poem... but at some places I found the flow a little off ... may be you could work the structure of the poem...

a good read...

"As white doves fly over a patriotic nation,
The crowd looking up, recognizing King's Salvation,
He will dissect this country through precise Mutilation,
And put us back together as a much better nation"

..I LOVE this opening, beautifully written, so much striking imagery that it's like I can -see- what you're describing, and there's so much emotion that I'm instantly pulled into the piece.

"His words echoed, world atoned.
Words so great, rattle the bone.
His hand in the air,memories sewn.
Thanks to a change, this nation to be honed."

^^I found the flow in the last line to be -slightly- of, maybe try it so you have:

Thanks to change, nation to be honed.

"Strolling Carelessly, Through the cold frigid night,
The children of a hero, Tucked safely out of sight.
It's been one day and this whole nation still sore
We can thank that someone brave to fight the greatest war"

^^ I found the depth in this stanza to be incredible, and so moving that it brought out so many emotions for me as the reader. However some of the fillers threw the flow a little at times, maybe :

Strolling Carelessly, Through the cold frigid night,
Children of a hero, Tucked safely out of sight.
It's been one day and this whole nation still sore
Thank that someone brave to fight the greatest war

"Not the Taliban, or oil price
or the battle against the ice.
But the war that has never stopped, here in our own nation,
In my opinion, Screw the racists, here comes your salvation"

^^Try eliminating "the" in the closing line, it seems to flow better that way..that being said..holy crap, I love this ending, powerful hard hitting, and a beautiful way to wrap up this elegant piece.

Very nice rhyme scheme refltct upon a theme close to my heart . I could not have stated it better

well done

The poem has a very good rhyming flow and the content / meaning of the poem comes across very strong through your wording =]
It's a good piece and your going to be a talented writter one day ^^