Prayer of Chastity
by SashaMirage Feb 16, 2009
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Desiring guidance and undeserved mercy |
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15 years ago
by Krathia
Mm, there are some very nice lines here... The ones that definitely caught my attention was: "I am no angel", "If I were a crystal and symbolically pure" and "I know this fruit has been forbidden to taste".
All I can suggest is to pay some attention to meter and flow, and also, like before, beware of punctuation at the end of lines. I know it feels stifling when you're writing it, I have the same problem, but to the reader, it looks strange when there's nothing there. Otherwise, keep writing! -
15 years ago
by Mister 47
God , did not create us perfect . he did not want us do be perfect , he dont expect us to be perfect dear.
god put in us the power of choice , becasue in each one of us he will face difrent paths in his life and each one will face chalenges.
it si like a famer , planting his seeds ,he throw some they drop in good land they grow and be good plants, and some drop in roky land , so they die before they reach the ground. and some land btw thrones so they grow but when they are big the thornes will strangle them and kill them ..
god never look at us as black and white , but always see us in our weakness and love us even we are sometimes siners.
god always look at us and help us to choose waht is best for our lifes , to choose the right paths ,and take the neccesary choices , to fix our wrongs.
god never want us to be miserables, but along the way he let us see the light, and he want us to folow that light to him .
remember no one si perfect but god .
good one 5/5 -
15 years ago
by Mister 47
God , did not create us perfect . he did not want us do be perfect , he dont expect us to be perfect dear.
god put in us the power of choice , becasue in each one of us he will face difrent paths in his life and each one will face chalenges.
it si like a famer , planting his seeds ,he throw some they drop in good land they grow and be good plants, and some drop in roky land , so they die before they reach the ground. and some land btw thrones so they grow but when they are big the thornes will strangle them and kill them ..
god never look at us as black and white , but always see us in our weakness and love us even we are sometimes siners.
god always look at us and help us to choose waht is best for our lifes , to choose the right paths ,and take the neccesary choices , to fix our wrongs.
god never want us to be miserables, but along the way he let us see the light, and he want us to folow that light to him .
remember no one si perfect but god .
good one 5/5
