Hold Me, Thrill Me, Kiss Me

Laying awake together, tangled up in your sweet embrace
Fingers running through my hair, this feeling can never be replaced
Head resting on your chest, serene smile appears on my lips
This feeling so new to me, for I'm surfing in such magical bliss
-sensual! you have painted a scene of resting and loving hearts where troubles do not bother, very serene that it coincides with a seemingly everlasting peace.

As your arms encircle my hips, whole world slowly melts away
Gazing in your eyes so lovingly, can you see my joy on display
Hearts pumping together in unison, such a wonderful steady beat
Used to think I could survive alone, yet in your arms feel so complete
-this one’s more sensual than the 1st stanza, the love here seems to burn as if an atom in fission waiting to burst, the last two lines is so sweet, a love so sweet that everything in this world do not matter and only to be together can fulfill one’s heart

For every time you glance my way, feel my defenses become so weak
No-one's ever gotten me like this before, this is something so unique
Those eyes, that face, that smirk like smile, each holds it's own appeal
Floating up in heaven whenever you're near, these feelings so surreal
-this is an adorable part here, you have portrayed an uncommon emotion and that is genuine love and your imagination here is beautifully drawn, lovely!

Goosebumps along the skin, your presence so easily excites and thrills
Know now what was missing in the past, for finally I've become fulfilled
Can never get enough, seems I'm missing you even when you're near
Giving you my heart, body, mind and soul, hoping you know I'm sincere
-I honestly enjoyed these lines, a longing heart that meets its fulfillment is very dear and the succeeding lines pictures how love can give everything just for its fulfillment, very sensual and sweet

For every time our lips meet, I'm so carelessly flying up in paradise
Heart beginning to skip beats as I can't help but close these eyes
Lingering in your soft embrace as tender kisses are sweetly shared
Who'd have known this feeling between us could never be compared
-this one’s very passionate showing fervent affection entrapped in ecstasy, the rhyme flowed very well which the thing I loved in reading poems. The succeeding lines are very adorable. Very enjoyable!

No more sorrow to be felt, there's no more tear-stained desperate eyes
No more empty nights sat up alone, there's no room for saddened cries
In the most sweetest way it seems my heart's being slowly overpowered
Left only with joy and happiness, all fear and hurt been devoured
-a verse filled with lasting hope, a love that doesn’t intersect with despair of adversities, though you didn’t mention one. I can feel a feeling of contentment throughout the two ending lines, two souls contented due to their presence.

Thought people existed to hurt one another, know now I was wrong
Tender, protective loving ways have shown me exactly where I belong
Shown me love, adoration; so many emotions growing up I was denied
Forever be eternally grateful, got me wishing to never leave your side
-for me this seems to be a pre-conclusion part, it sums up few points of the poem and gave me an idea of an eternal promise that cannot be broken and that is meant to last till eternity, I’m grateful I have read these lines, it’s really heart-enriching! ^^

And I know that each time I try to tell you how you got me feeling inside
No amount of words, or I love yous, could ever do justice or fully describe
Just how I'm coming to love and adore you more with every passing day
So all I can do is promise to cherish you, your love I'll never betray
-this part here can stand by its own, I really, really love how you ended this piece of art, I can’t find any words how to describe it, as though perfection isn’t enough, nothing beats the words coming from ones’ heart.

I enjoyed you work really! A Wonderful read!
Take Care,
Kenny
=5/5=

I do not like to read someones work and not comment at least. I can understand the emotions that are contained herein but the wordiness of the write throws me off rhythm. It could be just my penchant for succinctness.
A always an opinion.