You did a number on me and a fantastic job.

by Cotton Candy Clouds   Mar 3, 2009


Masked truths and playful charades.
Harmless intent but devastating effect.
Did you enjoy fiddling with my heart?
Tell me, was I an intriguing enough project?

When are you going to realize that to me,
you were far from just another game.
How is it that this was all a perfected act,
when I felt such a genuinely intense flame?

My heart was programmed to be very aware.
Do you know how perplexing feelings are?
You don't have a heart to carelessly spare.
No longer does it work to wish on a star.

Can you please just lift my veil?
I have been diligent for so long.
These emotions are out of date.
Can't all my feelings just get along?

You snatched away a luxurious fairy tale,
and transformed it into a vile tragedy.
Are you proud of your masterpiece?
I hope all of this was worthwhile.

Sorry princess, your fate is already set.
Obviously, prince charming isn't coming for you.
Should have known better than to get your hopes up.
It seems happily ever afters always are a taboo.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    The flow is off in alot of places .. But I really like your ideas . You have some really good rhymes that you don't see very often , and i really like the idea of such a harsh reality . I don't like the wording of the last line though .. You should fix it so you have a more powerful ending . 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Chocolate Addict

    Wow I absolutely love this. The way you describe it was fantastic.

    You snatched away a luxurious fairy tale,
    and transformed it into a vile tragedy.
    Are you proud of your masterpiece?
    I hope all of this was worthwhile.
    ^^I like how you portay fairytale as being snatched than questioning him in a sarcastic way in the 3rd stanza

    Sorry princess, your fate is already set.
    Obviously, prince charming isn't coming for you.
    Should have known better than to get your hopes up.
    It seems happily ever afters always are a taboo.
    ^^ I love how you end this poem, though it its filled with negative views but it isn't cliche like other poems which i have read. The last line really stood out for me. I like how you describe happily ever afters are taboo to you.
    Great Job

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    The emotion that lies within is so heartfelt. Great write, the flow was good as well as the structure. This had great imagery through out, it really painted a picture for me. Your use of vocabulary was nice and easy which I personally think made this poem flow nice since it wasn't over done with tons of big words. The flow was flawless in my opinion. The overall poem as a whole was outstanding, excellent write!!!

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Tabi,

    There is soooo much pain in your words...and bitterness as well.
    I hope this is just a poem and not how you really feel, my dear girl...if it is, then you know my door is always open for you!

    Hugs,

    5-5 Ingrid