The Eleventh Hour

I must say, I really enjoyed the flow of this one.
The title also was really catching for me,
something just made me want to read it.

I really gotta give you kudos for your rhyme on this one, woah. If you were to look at the rhyming words out of context they'd look so forced, but you worded each stanza..each line in a way that made it so natural. Poetic.

Once again though your punctuation seems a tad mixed up...adding random comas at the end of each line even though the sentence shouldn't be finished.

"Majestic hours end the fight
against the wishes of the night.
the clock begins to spread its reign,
counting down, yet still in vein.
"Please don't sow me down."

No longer laughing at the cry,
they simply stare into the lie.
Until the present none was true
and through the wait they bid adieu.
"Please don't sow me down."

Masses gaze into the mist,
clinching hope within each fist.
Midnight is but nearing still
upon it's tick their blood will spill.
"Please don't sow me down."

Sidewalks running red with blood
begin to crumble in the flood,
and, ending now to our dismay,
We learn to live upon this day.
"Please don't sow me down.""

Another thing I'd like to point out is that even though as a technical poem this was extremely well written it seemed very cold, there was no story no hidden meaning. Maybe try bring a bit of yourself to each poem, a bit of your thoughts...your emotions.

Good work, though.

This poem was interesting. but I don't really understand it clearly enough to write what I normally write, a really long comment. Could you send me a message maybe explaining the poem?
Although I didn't exactly get it I liked the fact that the rhyming was very simple because sometimes when people use really complex words within their poem it becomes not at interesting you could say. This poem i sense has some depth within it and it has good imagery. I also liked how you used repetition of the sentence "Please don't sow me down." It made the poem more interesting to read and added emphasis to it as well.
xxxx Great read xxxx
5/5