A Touch Of Magic

Joe,

First of all i'd like to say thank you for commenting on my piece, I do appreciate it muchly. Although i'm sure the first line of my haiku has 5 syllables. None the less thanks for the piece, and if infact you are right then thanks for noticing my mistake.

Now onto the poem.

This piece had quite a postitive effect. I felt as though when I was reading this you were quite cheerful and bubbly whilst writing this. The wording seemed to just bounce off one and other in order to create a unique effect.

I liked the retorical questions you used throughout this piece. It was interesting. The whole poem was original in my opinion, you used music as a portal and it really worked. While reading this I felt as though this could be read to children as quite a beautiful poem. Due to the uprising feeling it gives you while reading.

"
How cheerful - to be - Music!
How divine - like a Rose -"

I actually really liked the lines above, expecially the second one although I feel as though they complemented each other quite beautifully together. You entwined beauty with music in this piece and created a wonderful piece.

Well done, an enjoyable read.
-Mel

This was entertaining to read, I liked the form (albeit, it was a bit too broken up). Punctuation was a bit haphazard, and I think you were meant to write 'amongst'.

'Then creation is amoungst us!
Quiet! it's a surprise - you know!'

I loved this bit; this poem possessed a lovely imagery that was consistent throughout. A good variation on Bliss' title.

'To play acoustic - the brilliant Ballad -
A touch of magic!'

Liked how you personified the 'ballad', and the title at the end helped bring everything to context. Good luck in the contest, I really liked this piece. Original and quite perky. :)