Enmity Felicity

I agree with the comments above that sometimes it seems that the lines didn't rhyme, even though when I looked back every line did. I don't believe it is because of the length of the lines but because there were to many words that are not used in our "every-day language" so sometimes you had to stop and think til everything melted down :)
otherwise an awsome poem with a lot of feeling in it..
This was my favourite part:
"who would have thought that
this beautiful creature would turned out to be the devil"

First of all srry i took so long responding to your post in my forum topic "plz love me" but im commenting now :)

i love your use of words they are very descriptive and i love how you stayed away from the words that are way overused by poets. hope you know what i mean cuz i cant think of any examples at the moment :) any way great job rated 5/5

I think your poem was really well structured
The longer lines made for greater meaning
Sometimes the rhymes were lost because of this
But overall a really good poem
That i'm really glad i got to read

Alright alright has diappointed has i am with myself. my vocoabulary isnt so high or so good. i like your poem but i had sum trouble understand with word i didnt know what they meant. and for that i am sorry. sum part i did but sum i lost myself.
i like what i read.

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

This poem was excellant. The rhyme was good even though the lines were somewhat long. The flow was good also. This was another poem showing another side of nature that you did really good on. Good job.