Uh idk

by MERCY is never shown   May 1, 2009


From all the voices in my head
written down words
on the wall with lead
what to say
and what to do
causing trouble
cursing you
shrill laughter rips
from lips that are mine
the voice to strong to be my own
laid down upon this shrine
sacrificing myself
body spirit mind
no fight no struggle
against the invisible bind
"good girl, don't fight"
"but its not yet your time"
their voices their words
the guardians of mine

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  • 14 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    Out of the the 3 works i have read so far, this is by far the best. The idea behind it all was amazing and you portrayed it magnificently with your words. Great job, and amazing flow. A well deserved 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by LiveLoveLearnDie

    It is a really neat poem,
    however i feel that some of it was forced, you said you haven't written for a while etc... tak eyour time writting and you'll get some awesome poetry like I have read many time before.
    there are some parts that flow beautifully and others that make me question.

    shrill laughter rips
    from lips that are mine
    though the voice is not

    the baove 3 lines seem a little forced and on't flow, prehaps it needs a little change of language, I'm not really sure to be honest, but that is just my feelings.

    Hope it helps =]

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