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by StandStill   May 8, 2009


I can whisper to you all my
inequities and
dependencies if only
you would

comealittlecloser.

I do believe I'm dying
just to hear your heartbeat
from
seven.....thousand........miles..........away......

.....................riding.........roller............up..
We keep on.............this........coaster..........and

d
o
w
n

I think I'm a tad
miffed because of
all the feather ruffling
you've been doing to my nest.

Let it
d
...r
....o
......p

so we can start again.

I could whisper all of my
insecurities
and scrutinies
if only
you would hear me.

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  • 12 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Great way to mix form and content! Loved it!

  • 12 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Great way to mix form and content! Loved it!

  • 13 years ago

    by Mello193

    This was amazing. i like how you made it look to add a such emotion to the lines, you are a brilliant writer, great job ^u^

    -193

  • 14 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very interesting form. I liked it. The wording was great. I enjoyed reading it. The only change you might make is:
    "comealittlecloser." separate the words out.
    Other then that it is a great poem.

    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by iRobbiee

    Very creative and different.. I like this poem because its just different.

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