A Vague Repose

You emerge from things filled with spirit,

*I would take out the "from things" it seems odd here and doesn't flow well with the rest of the line.*

a mosaic nightmare;

*I love that you said "mosaic" I don't think I've ever seen that word used to describe a nightmare before. But it's a good word, because nightmares are often just a mixture of pictures.*

you are the word ---
lachrymose.
lamenting like a fallen dove.

*I love ow you break this down here. It's ver simple but I get so much for your words. The alliteration is nice as well*

scream for me once more,
amidst the marble staircase
to the gods.

*Whoa...this was a little random, but I like the way you worded it*

tell me you are wholly
responsible for breaking down the doors
to my reliquary, and sing a requiem of sorts
into my gutless ears.

*Wow...now that stanza before makes sense lol. Your diction is amazing here. "reliquary" "requiem" those are perfect. Wow...where do you think of these things Nova. I have to know what made you so talented. Jeez I'm jealous lol. I loved this stanza. My favorite I think. Your words are so powerful. :) *

don't leave me
begging.

*I like how you put this here after such a powerful stanza, it slows things down a little and picks the flow back up, clever clever :) *

when you choose to be silent as a star:
remote and candid, in the penetrable sky,
I still know your fear: and I will follow you.

*That line is super creepy and I love it. I'm nor sure what to say about this poem hun. I liked the attention to deail and the imagery is so well done. Your diction blows my mind like literally and the emotions are hard hitting. That's all I can really say. Good job :) Nik*