Shade under the mushroom

Interesting chose of wording, the imagery i was very good but maybe if you could expanded more, but this was still very well-written. 3/5 ^.^

Interesting way to write. The imagery was really good.

"Here i sit between a world of black and certain death.
can you make my decision?"

All of the "i"s in this poem need to be capitalized but otherwise this was a good opening. And adding the question at the end had a nice affect.

"the shade grows cold, but still i stay.
i am death in its form of flesh."

Very entrancing and powerful lines, well-penned.

"i represent humanity and all of its sins.

can you make my decision?"

I felt like again, you could have expanded more, but this was still very well-written. Take care and God Bless You!

~MaryAnne