Day Kisses Night~Collab

by Poet on the Piano   Jul 20, 2009


She elegantly sits
atop colorless cushions,
anxiously awaiting her prince.

Mindlessly working,
as she crawls across
the aging day.

Her light is dimming
yet effortlessly
she breathes fire.

Passion flares
stain royal blue skies
a sanguine tint.

As buoyant wings of
powerful devotion
grant her stability

Glowing fervor
hypnotically
tugs him closer.

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Collab with Temps, please leave her a comment too:

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/nature/poems.php?id=1125658

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  • 14 years ago

    by Kaila

    Again vocabulary is flawless. Just a simple and sweet poem. I very much enjoyed. nice work

  • 14 years ago

    by Shinobi

    A very nice piece! The princess is waiting for her beautiful prince charming to come for her. This is not like the fairytales as she is aging into her death...
    She waits, and her waiting is becoming harder by the time, she breathes fire, which could be her emotions burning from the inside. Her only savious is her devotion to the prince, such beautiful true love.

    Liked this poem very much, everything flowed well, don't have any suggestions. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    This was a beautiful poem. Simply said with a steady flow. Enjoyable in every way.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This was really beautiful, girls:)

    Very poetic language. In poetry it is all about using the right adjectives to make a piece that is memorable:)

    Passion flares
    stain royal blue skies
    a sanguine tint.

    ^^

    Like here "royal bleu"and " sanguine" are well chosen to create an image. It is the icing on the proverbial cake.

    Neat:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Thank you for coming to me wanting to collab.. It was a pleasure to work with you. You did a brilliant job on your part and I think in the end we made a beautiful piece. I hope to work with you sometime down the road. :] 5/5 for your part!