Here Stands the Glass

Bloody brilliant. The flow was beautiful and it had a terrific timeless class to it. five out of five stars!

Wow, i love this one. some people don't know how exactly to write poetry. but i gotta say, you do :) keep it up..

Good job! i like this poem! 5p

Congrats Jeannie :)
Love Cindy

"When pain has tipped the heart of glass
And time finds no relief
So many things may come to pass
Stay true inside the grief"

A excellent opening, I like how you just are positive and give off a sense of hope here. I found this whole concept brilliant and well-penned.

"Where turns the clock that spins the soul"

The wording here is fantastic and simply pulls the reader more in to your words.

"If trouble comes along
To chill the hurt and find the hole
Inside the heart done wrong"

Great work so far, this is just stunning!

"Somewhere beneath the moonlit glow
A burden's left to bear
Against the winds of winter's snow
A heart's caught unaware"

Your descriptions hold my attention and you express all the pain and emotion so well.

"Deep in the mind a turmoil comes
To shatter life it seems
Leaves the wounded heart unstrung
Among the broken dreams"

Wonderful word usage like "unstrung" was very unique and fit well, and so did "turmoil".
This is a powerful write, keep it up!

"Upon the shards of glass are tears
That time may try to heal
Inside the mind are wasted years
The soul tries hard to feel
But come the day that pain is eased
With hope the heart is caste
No strings to twine the pain apeased
'Til then...
Here stands the glass"

Wow, what a striking ending, just simply beautiful. Such much meaning you portrayed in yoru words, and you words were felt by the reader. Congrats on the win, you really deserved this! You have much talent and it shined through on this poem.

A very impressive poem, keep it up!

~MaryAnne