Mint Green Forest.

I feel the poem alters too much, i mean it doesn't but i think it does, it blinks involuntarily with the chilled breeze, but then slides into a peaceful slumber. I liked it, it was just that last line that i was a bit hmm about, overall though i love the words and structure.

I feel the poem alters too much, i mean it doesn't but i think it does, it blinks involuntarily with the chilled breeze, but then slides into a peaceful slumber. I liked it, it was just that last line that i was a bit hmm about, overall though i love the words and structure.

Very good. I have an image of a tree, basking in the sunlight in the late afternoon, feeling so warm and cozy, slowing relaxing their limbs, dosing off. Well done.

Very very Impressive There is absolutely nothing wrong with this poem.
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Nature poem, my favorite:)

A mint green
forest of yawning
trees dissolve eerie
silence of a shaded
evening--

Good descriptions here, yawning trees..I loved that expression!

as their felted
limbs of emerald-
drowsy by the sun's
uninviting glare; blink
involuntarily with the
chilled breeze...

^^
Lovely adjectives.. emerald-drowsy mmmhhh yah!

gently allowing their
exhausted arms
fall to the side,
bidding adieu--
sliding into a
much needed
slumber.

^^
that last part was really weak! I was so dissapointed when I read "sliding into a much needed slumber"those words were so common, not poetical at all:/
why not:
sliding into
blissfull
slumber

"much needed"sounds so..idk educational, something a mother would say to her children, lol.

I loveeed this poem, though;)

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