Peace Be With You...

by groovydude   Aug 5, 2009


As I sit here with a heavy heart
wondering how it ended before it could even start
I still feel the love
As I see it slip away
She now see`s happiness
In another way
A new life to start
In another town
I want to be happy for her
But mostly I frown
I hope she finds her rainbow
and the gold in the end
when she is gone
at least I had made a FRIEND

peace be with you my love....

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  • 14 years ago

    by Nee

    "at least I had made FRIEND"
    ^I think you should place an "a" before "friend"..
    and I don't know why you capitalized the word friend..I didn't really like that and don't think it's necessary.

    Your rhyme didn't flow that well either, a little bit forced I see.

    Write on.

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    It is so sad when someone we love leaves us. All your feelings still remain. A very heartfelt piece.
    Good job!
    Take Care
    Cindy

  • 14 years ago

    by Robert Kerry Gardiner

    Very well written..

    As I was reading this poem I felt a reminder of where i've come from and how much i've ben through in my short life. I remember going through the same things that the words in this poem are talking about.

    "I still feel the love
    As I see it slip away"

    That line right there brought back about a million memories of lost loves that I thought would work out, great work on this poem.

    Kerry Gardiner

  • 14 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    A very touching write... Sad, beautiful, and tenderly written. Very well done.

    All the best and take care.

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Sad but you wished her well and expressed the love that could have been. Well done.

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