Who I Am

"I do not heed the given command
From those so evil they're deemed the damned.
Nor do I bow at the feet of a priest
Whose blessed tongue can't form unholy speech.
I cannot bear to hear untruths spoken
Or admit defeat to a life that's shattered and broken.
But I do not care about my physical being
And I'll turn my back on a wound that's not done healing."

The wording here was marvelous, I could not find one grammar error at all and the feeling here was so real to the reader, you put them in your thoughts.

"I cannot have my things disgraced by name.
But me, you'll curse, and I'll feel no shame.
Though never will I voice a beg or plea.
I cannot give up, so leave my wounds to bleed.
I will not ask for help no matter how much it's needed.
I depend solely on myself; therefore, I cannot be defeated.
I do not know how to accept affection.
I am more at ease with my inner depression."

Very independant you are. My only suggestion here would be to add comma's most of the time and not periods, I felt like there were to many short breaks, when there could have just been pauses. Very mature and professional, this is very original.

"I can easily be hated and I can hate easily.
Though never do I hate without a perfectly good reason.
My tongue is never even a little in my heart.
And if you will it to do so, I applaud on your part.
My soul and heart are blacker than ebony
But that does not mean there is no love in me.
It is hard to classify a person as a friend or enemy.
Because we all wear masks, some more than two or three."

These words were very striking and definetly made me think. Your words spoke such truth here, "it is hard to classify a person as a friend or enemy, because we all wear masks, some more than two or three." This really just hit me and what a thought-provoking write you have woven together.

"But I, above all else, am human, just like the person before.
And we all have our own personalities, hearts, and inner wars.
Significantly different, yet all together the same.
Me, you'll never know but you'll remember my name."

A powerful ending, you expressed yourself very well in this piece and gave the reader such imagery and feeling. Excellent work, this was a pleasent joy to read.

5/5 from me, keep writing, always and forever..

~MaryAnne

I've never done a poem that describes myself, maybe i should try.

i like the poem.

I loved it. Excellent work (5/5)

Very well written Laila.
I love the burst of individuality and self assurance in the first two stanzas. The poem was very rhythmic and expressive towards ideas of self empowerment which many people lack. The narrator, though wounded and unhealed, still treads on the bumpy paths that cross his/her way, and though it may seem eternal there is always hope, though
"My soul and heart are blacker than ebony
But that does not mean there is no love in me."

5/5

This whole poem is very interesting

Great job