Worst Pain

Wow, haha thats all i can really say! it was great and filled with soo much feeling. keep it up :)

Howw sad.
Totally impowering.

I look up with pleading eyes
Surrounded by all my lies
My tears bleed red as I twist and turn
Screams fill the silence as I slowly burn

*Wow what an intense way to start a poem. It makes me really wonder what's happening to you. I love the diction you use as well*

Aching inside from all the hurt
Trampled over like I am dirt
She's looking out from within
Forced to pay for my own sin

*I love the second line. That's a really great metaphor, I can really pcture it too*

Flames lick my body as I cry "no more"!
I'm bruised and broken to the core
Clawing pain slowly eats at my soul
Rips away everything that made me whole

*Hmmm I would have liked to see more happen with this but I love what you wrote. This last stanza was flawless but as a whole this was a very creative and creepy poem. I loved reading it. Keep it up hun. Nik :) *

This poem portrays such anguish. :( It is beautifully and sadly provocative.

Good write.I fell right through the flow.4/5 good job