Frozen; {wounds that listen to you.}

by Brenda   Sep 27, 2009


Even in the warmest of nights.
I remain frozen at heart.
so many wounds; left in me.
none of them showing signs of healing.

this battle took the best of me.
with you as my only enemy.
I fought with all my will; and courage.
yet that white flag waved from my eyes.

now all that's left; is total repair.
there are no more tears for me to cry.
yet there is still pain to feel;
in the process of saying goodbye.

even in the warmest of nights.
I'll shiver with total despair.
so many wounds; left in me.
all of them listening to only. . you.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Em

    Goodbye is one of the worst things to say especailly to somebody we loved, 5/5. Em

  • 14 years ago

    by Kurt

    I appreciated the use of description to hook the reader and cause them to want more. The whole poem actually contained quite a bit of descriptions.

    The rhyming seemed a bit sketchy at times and almost forced. However, the rhythm and flow maintained an even pace avoiding any hiccoughs or skips in beat.

    Lastly the last stanza really wrapped up the poem and provided a chilling description of your pain.
    "So many wounds; left in me.
    all of them listening to only.. you."
    Truly sent shivers down my spine because it nailed how it really feels to be in pain. Wonderful write with great utilization of details and description.

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