Moons and Fairy Tales

by WakingFreedom   Oct 20, 2009


The moon and stars speak of our destiny
As the roads we take bring us along our journey
Take my hand, take my heart, be my everything
For I want to be your Aurora Borealis, always glowing
We can travel the universe through night and day
Through the milky galaxies we can drift away
Your heart is like a swirling black hole
Sucking me into a love, long lasting and more

The words I am writing aren't just words
They're from the different feelings of my inner world
Once they were trapped in a dungeon cold and grey
Then you came along and whisked them away
Together we became a fairy tale of our own
Like king and queen on a heart felt throne
Riding into the sunset on your noble steed
We set off into a direction fit for you and me
Our love like a spell intertwined through our souls about
With a happily ever after engraved into our hearts

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  • 14 years ago

    by DarkCrystalbtrfy

    Three letters W.O.W amazing work id lit all of my favorite lines but that would be 80% of the peom. so my fav fav lines were:

    For I want to be youre aurora borealis, always glowing
    We can travel the universe through night and day
    Through the milky galaxies we can drift away

    As I was reading this I got quite the view! Most love poems are too sappy but im defenatly impressed by this one. I look forward to reading your other works.. 5/5 bravo!

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    For I want to be youre aurora borealis, always shining

    * Youre should be "you're" and I would change "shinning" to "glowing" I think "shinning" is better when you are talking about stars and in this case I would say "glowing" But I like this line. I've never heard it before*

    The universe is our limit through night and day

    *I didn't understand this line much. When you say "limit" what do you mean? Are you saying the universe is keeping you from seeing night and day? I'd change that somehow. It really confused me*

    Your heart is like a swirling black hole

    *I love this line. It's brillant. I would never have thought to use a black hole in this way. That is so creative. :)*

    The words I am writing arent just words

    *"arent" should be "aren't"*

    Their from the different feelings of my inner world

    *You used the wrong form of there here. "Their" should be "they're" or "they are" *

    Together we became a fairy tale of our own
    Like king and queen on a heart felt throne

    *These two lines are so sweet and child like. I really liked this poem hun. I think your love story is sweet and creative. I love the imagery and the new way you word your lines. Keep it up. Nik*

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