I been there before...

by Ash   Nov 11, 2009


I been there before where you stand right now,
I faced the world and did not hide.
I made it through though I don't know how,
All I know for sure is you're the reason why.
Why I dream those dreams I know I can achieve,
Why I face life now with a smile that won't deceive.
Why I can be who I am and not deny,
This world is a better place because of you and I.

I want to hold in my hand the treasures you gave,
Take every step as my own - not a slave.
I'm going to make those decisions and stop this intense craving,
Live my dreams to the fullest upon a gold-plated paving.

I know we're different but I know it's because of you,
Your support gave me the strength to make things new.
You're the reason why I try and still believe,
That in this place I don't live to please.

I know you don't need anyone but one day you'll see,
The truth behind it all and the real me.
That you're just a broken bottle if I'm not around,
Bloodshed, tears and alcohol being your only sound.

I solemnly testify life is beautiful because of people like you,
You sparkle beauty and put a spring in every step I never once knew.
I can tell you that emptiness and loneliness will never be known,
When you're around hearts won't turn to cold stone.
Every face will be graced with the most perfect smile,
Laughter filling the air even across the mile.

It's an open road and I'll face every test,
'Cuz I know you're there and I shall contest.
To this world and it's faith that seems so grim,
Hope but shimmering so low and dim.
But your presence is all it take to make things right,
Provide enough reason to continue to fight.

When I'm down and don't know where to go,
The veil across my eyes don't vanish for a path to show.
I think of all the advice you gave for my sake.
I think of the friendship you've given, not just for me to take.
I think every person deserves a gift as precious as you.
I think you deserve much better because you're one of those special few.

And I'll tell you that it's true,
I'll give up my dreams, my life just for you.
Cos you're the reason I still have a notion and a glimpse of who I can be,
Bounded but filled with such strength as a solid, old oak tree.

You've given me enough reason though you've broken me within,
Yet every time I'm made stronger so that I can win.
You don't know how special you are and what you mean to me,
But I wouldn't want to change you only the way that you see....

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  • 13 years ago

    by Extinct Angel

    Great work of suspence and thrill of emotion you know what i mean? anyway great read keep it up 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by SolemnWish

    I want to hold in my hand the treasures you gave,
    Take every step as my own - not a slave.

    I think the line should be changed to "not as a slave" but thats just my opinion. Thats how i wanted to read it.
    I really do love your poems. There long but thoughtful and keep the reader interested. They arent the kind of poems that your surprised for the ending but the kind of poems that your sad that it ended :)
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    Very well done. Very well done. How many friends have we had that offer critiques out of friendship and caring, out of respect? Your idea and feelings came through nicely. You did have a few errors in your grammer, but not enough to hurt the poem. I will say, you could have used " 'cuz," instead of "cos." I think it's acceptable here. And on one of your stanzas, might I offer a change?

    I think of the many words of advice you gave,
    I think of the precious gift of friendship that I now have.
    I think that every person deserves a gift as precious as you,
    But I know it's true you deserve someone better for you're one amongst them special few.

    How about:
    I think of all the advice you
    gave for my sake.
    I think of the friendship you've given,
    not just for me to take.
    I think every person deserves a gift
    as precious as you.
    I think you deserve much better,
    because you're one of those speacial few.

    I hope this helps in case you want to edit your poem. It's up to you. Although, your message still comes though none the less. Still, I think I'm adding this poem to my favorites list.

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