Retribution

I dont like it Sorry!

Jenn,

I've been quite slack with my comments lately but I thought i'd start with you because this piece was absolutely awesome. You know what I love so much about your writing. It is that you have the ability to change your style and I believe that is because you love to learn. You love to try new things. That was evident here.

The first stanza, It was beautiful in my mind. For some reason I pictured a volcanic erruption.. The Smoldering smoke falling from lips, seeping into the lungs. And the hot lava of your heart.. [yes I do have quite a strange imagination]

"Smoldering words fall from vacant lips
Each syllable curling around my heart
Seeping into my lungs, smothering me
Death by my own sword"

Definitly my favorite stanza the above.

however I also adored these two line:

"Like a mind with no filter, I spewed my venom
Sweet poisons of truth"

I loved the contrast between your words. Dark and vicious but sweet and elegant..
While this poem was sad it definitly held beauty in your words.

Adored this poem. Excellent work!
-Mel

This is beyond amazing,defently my type of poetry love love love it
the ending was,perfect.