I am not a very good writer. I know absoultely nothing about writing styles , flow , or anything. I just read and try to put myself into the story. I could easily do that with this poem. I could also place myself in either the changing seasons of life or a relationship.
Yellowish & brownish are not poetic words in my eyes, I would use a different word - also maybe use a different word for dancing at the end since you've already used it once - other than that I agree with all that has been said, this is an excellent poem, you're definitely improving.
Though it is a beautiful poem Rania, I for one long for you to move on to a place where the woman within is in such a happy place she lights up each verse with the sparkle of joy
I believe is just waiting to be set free ....
I think it is already there & only awaiting a reason to be free .....5/5.....Jim
Hahahahaha looooool thats a gd reply for my email ( bout being impatient lol) P.charming
this is gr8 hehe
9 years ago
I dont usually like poems are nature and trees and stuff like that because i cant seem to get into them D: But this one must have been an exception because i absolutely loved it ! There is just something about your words naza! they always seem to flow so nicely together!!
I really liked this poem a lot. You have turned Autumn into seemingly a person who is waiting for there loved one to come which would be winter. A lovely piece with vivid images and great imagery.
"Arrogant gust recoloring dreams
green to orange as yellow beams
From deep inside the arid lands,
cold nips the warmth of my hands"
This line really stood out to me, as it gave a beautiful image to the reader and at the end of it gave a bit of sadness as well. A greatly penned piece from beginning to end. Good job and keep writing.