One of those nights

by iRobbiee   Sep 14, 2010


One of those nights

Its one of those nights where you
Just want to lay there and cry
And you hope that someone hears you
So you won't have to lie anymore

Its one of those days
When nothing goes right
And you just can't seem to fight
So you just lay there on the floor

The days that you feel
Worthless
Stupid
And all yu want to do is sream.

You just wish it would all
Just go away.
But maybe one day
Just one day
You'll wake up from the dream,
It will all get better

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  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Any line you have that starts with 'and' or 'so' the word can be removed, it will flow a lot better that way, they are silly fillers that you don't need. Other than that, a nice poem that a lot of us can relate to , I so know what you're talking about!

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Such a very sad poem over here, you have penned down one of those poems when you make the reader feel like your letting ur feelings all out..

    tho its a free verse I just think some lines would sound a LOT more better, i wont give suggestions but I wil let you knw which I think you can really play more with :

    And you hope that someone hears you
    So you won't have to lie anymore

    The days that you feel
    Worthless
    Stupid
    And all yu want to do is sream.
    >>over here nothing to change but I think u missed both the letters o in you and C in scream :)

    You just wish it would all
    Just go away.]
    >>i really can relate to that

    But maybe one day
    Just one day
    You'll wake up from the dream,
    It will all get better
    >>a very wise ending, and I really like it, but I think you no bet can reword it in a very effective way

    in all cases
    5/5 for this

  • 13 years ago

    by XoXoBriannaoXoX

    This is really a great poem.
    i can relate very well to this.
    so thank you for writing this lol.
    but i really was beautiful.