I like how in the first verse you say you shine brighter due to the contrast of your surroundings .
Turn off the sun; my life still will shine from deep within
Dress me in black; watch me glowing like I have never been
From darkness I was born, yet rebelled with a white skin
Demolish me in dimness, but even then I can potentially win......
Rania I found the entire poem so beautifully expressed & so very well written though I am a little confused by the statement the last verse makes ( for I candidly despise light )
Maybe its because you grow tired of continually fighting the darkness so the light may shine ? ...I don't know , I'm not trying to be technical only trying to find & understand its deeper meaning ...
It is once again a beautiful piece of poetic expression you've penned her & i really enjoyed reading it .....5/5.....Jim
This holds some deep meanings which makes
the reader to think about. From what I gathered, a life living within the darkness yet
fights for a positivie outlook...maybe I am wrong but that is what I got. Very interesting
& thought provoking!
Wow! This poem is so deep and emotional... It really touched me... I loved the whole concept.. From the title to the very last line of the poem... So nicely written! And I love that it's so unexpected.. I couldn't exactly guess what this poem would be about and I liked that about it... I loved the poem... It was so interesting and I liked the idea of hating the sun and trying to make it "stop" because you're feel depressed and dark... I love it!!!
I think the last stanza was definitely the strongest and the best, simply the perfect ending! Wonderful job!
'and my misery fears the revelation of its hidden duskiness
for I mourn, I revive within my own mystery - nonetheless
I breathe the pain of my lonesomeness, which I repress'
^Honestly I didn't like the rhyming of words with ness at the end, I think they become so lengthy and sound so awkward, although they rhyme they just seem to be a bit off.
A wonderful write, showing that you can overcome anything, no matter how deep the darkness, you will always rise above, finding that light in your heart to keep you going...nice write
Sorry about the despising thing, but....
not much about your presentations or profile, including name, shows that to be so...
So...I'm 'guessing' you took on this angle on the subject as a challenge?
absolutely successfully I say...
Thank you for your very kind words re 'mid-September'...