Danae & the falling star

That last line fulfilled that "grace" that made itself known throughout this piece so softly...it was graceful in every aspect and read to me at such ease and romance.

"She wakes when Jupiter's light
Showers her sparkling from a dream;
Insistent, steady, cascading, emotive,
It draws her to the door, into the beam."

- What draws me here is the way you order your words, it sounds elegant and only a real writer can weave them in eloquence and true loyalty to the writer's heart.
"cascading, emotive"- gives the radiance and warmth out.....I love the idea of "Jupiter's light"- it really isn't just an idea, it is a truth that grows in this piece, giving this female character incentive, hope.

"She crosses the threshold, through the yard
And into the naked woods, alone;
Town lights far behind and hidden
Beyond the other side of known."

- Simplicity draws the real character here. It is wonderful how so much is displayed, so much described and it still pulls me in her path. The mystery of the "naked woods" alone and seeking those town lights fill me up with wonder!

"Leaves crunch underneath but
Nothing alive stirs away from her;
Planet outlights etched limbs, empty,
Branched out, thick but give no cover."

- First two lines: Very soft and calming....I keep reading "Nothing alive stirs away from her", what a beautiful verse, as if nature waits for her and earth has a heartbeat with her melody. Reassuring and hints at that respect.

"As she gazes, at the father of planets
Sudden streak of light slashes her sky:
Perseus racing into the night, or
Comet myth burning dusty bright."

- Great implant of mythology, it gave it much more intrigue as well as the vibrant energy/imagery of "slashes her sky"- I like how you personify that.

"Silently she acclaims the gift
Leaves the woods to heavier space;
Yet she passes lighter of step:
Spirit lifted - heart full of grace."

- Such grace is uttered here, humbly and silently, but leaving the reader with piece.

A thoughtful piece that is interesting to feel the character deeper. Thanks for sharing.

MaryAnne