Needles [vent/free write]

I am sure we all have had this feeling before. I thought the feelings you were trying to convey were expressed very well in this poem. All of the comparisons such as an alcoholic and the title needles really make youq point and lets the reader know just how strong the feelings are. This was very well written. Thank u for sharing this with us. Great work.

Ben, I like the idea of this poem and it very interesting how you compare this loving Simone or even thinking about them and you co
Pare it to being pricked with a needle. The poem itself was well thought out and the lines ran smoothly making it easy to read and understand. You had many emotions and they all bring out manu thoughts and feelings.

I couldn't really find one line that liked the most but I will say that the entire poem goes very well and it does stick to it's topic at every new statement. I also like this poem because of its simplicity and how many can relate to your words.

Overall, I think you have done a great jib with this poem and that you got your emotions out really good with this vent. You have a good talent and I hope you use it to the best of your ability. I can't wait tosee some more of your work. Great job and keep writing.

Ben
Nice job! I sometimes wonder how someone can control all our thoughts awake or asleep. I guess when you love someone so much and that love isn't returned it is very painful and hard to get them out of the mind.
Take care
Cindy

An original way to think of thoughts of another. They are like needle pricks but each one seems to sting less than the one before. Well done.