Once again I enjoyed the read but I found myself connecting a little more to this poem than your last one. You had some really good descriptions in this piece here and as a result the poem was really effective and moved me.

"Don't tell me the river
doesn't flow through
your heart"

Excellent opening

5/5

This is another piece full of originality! And I am held speechless by your words. A brilliant read my dear friend!
Take care

Don't tell me you
aren't my world--
if not this was all in vain.

^
If this was the only stanza you wrote, I'd still think it was an amazing poem. That's how that last part impacted me. Definitely the best part of the whole poem, but the rest of the poem was amazing also. :]

Great job!

Cayce

That's what I usually call, a perfect poem :), that I find no words worth to praise it!

Excellent, way, of achieving perfection!

5/5 'course five

I'm glad to see you're writing a ton of love poems lately (I'll take credit for that inspiration :p) haha

The first three stanzas were pretty good, but definitely not your best. You did redeem yourself though with the last stanza that I thought was completely perfect to sum up the meaning of love.

That fact that you can wake up and see a smile and be entirely happy just with that, when that makes everything worth it.

"Don't tell me you
aren't my world--
if not this was all in vain."

Not sure I have anything to say about this, who could disagree?

Once again as always you've written a piece deserving of a 5/5 Atleast I know you never sacrifice your talent to save time. Give it everything you have and don't try and be one of these fools writing to win the weekly poetry contests. Well done as always :)

How do you write these powerful and vivid
writes to make my imagination run wild! I really liked this one...another excellent read!!

Good job...i really liked the last three stanza's...they were beautiful...my only advice is that the first stanza was just a bit too literal, but overall good job!