Elapsing (acrostic)

by Brittany C   Sep 1, 2011


Evening takes over like a wave, causing my mind to trill
Letting the dormant darkness come forth as the hail begins to fall
Apt to bring me down like winters chilling grasp always does
Pain is all I knew and to have someone rescue me, that's all I wanted.
Sins are remembered from the distant past where the pain came from
Intense throbbing just below my heart making me knell
Now I have left my youth where the pain once lived
Grand and scary a wreckage that was waiting to happen, passed by.

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  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    ^^^LOL Connie you naughty :P:P

    Ok, it is time to confess that the challenge was a disaster :P But believe me you mastered YOU did an awesome job and proved how amazing your writing abilities are!
    Good work, I hope to read more from you soon. :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    So this is an example of what Noura is trying to do to us lol. I didn't get all the details but this is very well done, I enjoyed it and learned a few things lol

    Connie

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    This is really good :) :) I absolutely loved it :)
    I was gonna see if I had a favorite part but truth is I love it all... Great job :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was great! A very good attempt at Noura's huge and very difficult challenge.

    I liked the rhymes at the beginning but these didnt carry on, not that they had to, but it kind of disturbed the flow.

    Other than that the words were used well.

    Well done
    Love
    Tara
    x x x

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