Spider Bite

Haha :D ur kool and that's funny,,yes let's find that mean spider ;) hehe

Oh what a tragic death. Thank goodness you wrote this poem. Now all we have to do is find that spider and make it pay. ;)

A very different write than your usual. Love the pain in the poem. The last lines are outstanding:

and finally the poison
reaching my heart,
with no final goodbyes.
I died
from nothing less
then a spider bite

I wonder if nothing "less" should be "more" to carry the metaphors meaning well.

Aww this is amazing. It is so wonderfully written, and the emotion is so clear. There is a lot of story in there. I think this.piece is extemely well written. Awesome job.

Aww this is amazing. It is so wonderfully written, and the emotion is so cleat.