Contradictions (Collab with Rabea Jadallah)

Overall a great concept and nice collaboration; however, to honestly critique this piece, I personally would say you used too many fillers (e.g. he, she, I, me, my). I know it is generally hard to write a poem about love without using those words, but I feel it could be much better leaving a majority of them out.

In the first stanza you have the word love twice, perhaps you could use a synonym for one of them.

Overall though, this was a great collaboration, looking forward to reading more from the both of you.

Keep up the great work!

- Joe

A beautifully penned piece. A really good read.

5/5

This poem is outstanding :).
Its breathtaking.

There are no signs of
her in my life, except
for the love I hold.
I don't know if she was
a dream, or a hallucination
in my head.

I love this stanza, not sure if it was all real or some illusion :).
Beautiful piece, it flowed perfectly & made you wanna continue to read. Couldn't tell who wrote which part it was so good :)
5/5