The changes made it a tad more confusing for me as I was not expecting the ending,
it has been a long time since I read this poem that i don't remember what ending it used to have but I don't think that this one was the one that used to have.
I mean I was not expecting the part about my son has his own mate... and so this changes what I though about the holy spirit. May be I need to re read it.
This was awesome. unlike most of the people if read it through. very deep. emotional even, it seems as if you have a better grasp of life and death everything and nothing pretty well. maybe even more then I. your poems are unique to say the least. i wonder how smart you actually are to have written this. this poem astounds me. GREAT job man