Like fine lace
friendships are woven
starting from a single thread.
and braided into a
delicate pattern of
^ I think "It's beginning" should be "Its beginning", you might want to insert a comma after "looped" and remove the space between the last word and the full stop, it's irritating. I mean it underlines the word, but oh well.. haha :P
I really like the comparison and the idea behind this because it's actually quite similar, since you may continue braiding it, which will strengthen the thread. A friendship will also keep growing if you take good care of it, but people need their freedom anyway. When things get tough you know the bond might undergo specific stresses and strains, but it would never tear.
is an original
morphing of personalities
some woven with
yet blending into
a lasting work
^ Insert a fullstop at the end of this stanza.
This stanza is what I call original, I love the idea behind this because it's true. No friendship is like another and you showed that with these few words. They definately contain a lot of meaning and are very powerful. I think it tells a lot about you, that you think, that every friendship will last regardless of who is "building" it or it at least shows that you believe a true friendship is meant to last and it does not matter how different two people may be.
As the fabric changes
shape, so do the times
shared in friendship
hand holding secrets
engage an eternal treasure
crafted by love
^ This stanza seems to lack punctuation, which makes understanding it a bit tough.
You added another foundation a friendship needs and that is the fact that you're able to rely on each other whenever. I also like how you developed this poem more into the friendship direction.
^ Now this sums it all up very well. I love this ending because the feelings are so pure and honest.
Overall I really loved this poem because the emotions are really strong and I like the flow of it. I know this is different from what you usually write, but it's as good as your previous poems if not better. :)
What a wonderful way of describing friendship. I can tell this comes from the heart, well, not literally from the heart, cause this will be bloody and all, lol, anyways, what I wanna say is that, this is one very honest poem, no pretense, like I said, I can tell cause Im your friend and the way you show me friendship is like the way you wrote this poem, beautifully. :D
This is a refreshing poem by far. Amongst all the 'love' and sad poems it's truly refreshing to see this aspect of life recognized. Friends make up such an integral part of our lives. Friends help us grow as we help them on their journey as well. The diversity that is friendship how we all come together to complete eachothers puzzle or in this case my all time favorite 'friendship bracelet'. When I read this poem I remembered days of Highschool when we'd all make those friendship bracelets and the deep meaning behind each strand. Thank you for bringing me back there.
This poem was a perfect portrayal of what friendship is. What it means to be friends, how it's meaning is far more deeper then just a word. Truly a breath of fresh air, I honestly wouldn't change a thing.
And so Connie, I could see this one coming.....now that you have gathered a whole team of PnQ friends. I also see the efforts you made when reaching out and touching all our hearts. So here is a tribute I wrote (originally for someone else), but now it is yours as well, significantly reworded, so it is exclusively for you to treasure:
A beautiful treatise to your friends well woven
a toast to friendship, so well sung
with delicate braids so well spun
may your friendship last many suns
through thick and thin we love you hun!
Thank you for your kind words for all of us.
Nominated with luv by your older friend.
9 years ago
by Chevalier des Fleurs
This is such an original and unique poem full of love and charm. It blossoms word to word, line to line into a masterful piece which describes what friendship truly is. It is very enchanting and really elegant and a wonderment in itself. 5/5
Such a heart warming piece. It is true that bonds of friendship are delicate but, they are worth the maintenance they require <3
9 years ago
by Tara Kay
What a unique and creative way to express the bonds of friendship.
This was so sweet, I could really relate to the words, as my best friend and I have shared some great times, and have this special bond in which you describe so well.
This was breathtakingly beautiful.
This write was perfect! Connie, all friendship poems are true yet they are rubbish sometimes Lol but this one was seriously seriously a front page material! if only I had one more vote, I would nominate this in no time!
Wow! This is the best friendship poem I have ever read... I loved it... I was captivated from the first line until the very end. I loved how you compared eternal friendships to woven lace, or some kind of fabric that lasts a lifetime. It was a very beautiful comparison and I loved the imagery you created. I also loved the structure and flow, it was just lovely !
The last stanza was a beautiful ending: