by Kevin Manning Oct 26, 2011
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
The opening of a door. |
by shayla
I really like your poem |
by Jenni
First of all I really like the title, it's eye-catching and pulled me in. I do like your descriptive words too, but I have to admit that you inserting a full stop after each and every line/verse makes reading quite tough and is somehow distracting. The feelings are there and I enjoyed how the poem developed. Overall I think this poem has potential, but needs some editing. |