This is a really nice poem,... ummm wait,, that sounded kinda lame.. what i mean IS... =D
The use of morning, afternoon, evening and goodbye, is wonderfully placed, building a plot-line, essentially drawing the reader in. the repetition as mentioned above builds a sense of whole (its a complete piece not a shard of a poem like a lot I've seen on PnQ)
And yet more important than these meaningless literary tools, is the feelings you embodied into the work... you make it quite clear you were feeling these emotions as you wrote it,
And you have no problem relaying this to paper (or font) a poem of this caliber is pretty rare on this site, from the 20 to 30 I have actually read.
7 years ago
by average thoughts
D whole idea..i hv nvr read smthin like dis b4.