Unexpected...

This is amazing. I agree with all that has been said so far. I love the uses of imagery and the emotions and the overall sort of story. It really is fantastic. Excellent job. 5/5 of course

I loved the imagery in this piece. Your descriptions are excellent. You gave me the tools needed to set the scene out in my head.

5/5

This is interesting, the imagery is amazing.
I found it somehow humorous because I wasnt expecting it to be your mom and The bright light to be a lit cigarette. I was picturing aliens that came to abduct you, I was also expecting a girl running and screaming. It seems like I watch thrillers
Movies. But back to the topic, I enjoyed reading it.

Interesting and greatly worded a well written poem I loved it and was delighted to read it 5/5

In the hour at twelve,
with darkness at its peak;
The crescent moon
shows patches of grey
from unnoticed craters

^ Great way in instantly making the reader succumb your beautifully described setting. That draws so much attention.

I succumb;
the pressure to shift my body
overpowers me and -
I need to release

^ And that definitely gives much evidence and details about your state of body and mind. I can feel the air was so thick.

My awaken thoughts
are quickly overturned
by the sound of footsteps
calling out my name

^ I swear someone can think you're talking about 'Boogey Man' or some sort of a serial killer who'd swish next into your room. That's creepy *-*

Courage was not mine

Intrigued

My hands;
by no control of my own
unlocks the door, the barrier
between this stranger
and I

^ Ah, haha.. you surprised me with your courage. I thought you'd just slip underneath your coverlets like nothing happened.. :p

What is this thing I see in front of me?
A firefly?
Or perhaps Tinkerbell
finding comfort in our dwelling
before moving onto the timeless parts of
Neverland

^ Things are getting slightly tense here, and I like that. and lollll :p someone comes into your room at night, and you think it's Tinkerbell :P ?? hahha.. I loveee it.

Then in an instant - a sigh of relief
as this stranger...

was actually my mum -
Walking towards me in the middle of the night
Pitch black
With a lit cigarette in her hand...

^ Lol, YOUR MOMMMM??? This is the least thing I expected. One would think a serial killer, a total stranger, an angel for example... but your moommm?> :p

Good thing I was on my way to the bathroom anyways

^ Now that's a super sudden block at the end. I think this specific line is your center of the poem... my God, that looks so simple while reading, but I think it's so refreshing at the same time. And it kind of relates to a typical incident that would happen to anyone. !!! ;)

Great one.