I like the way you ended things man
the views of a rebillous guy=-)
and it does sound really promising
some edits to this poem and it's worth a nomination imo,
5/5 be ez bud

PS: i still owe you two comments from your previous posts for my Poem (i'm done)
i'll get to that as soon as i'm done with stuff i promise <3

I love the style a wisdom this poem reflects I would not change a thing

I really appreciate the message this brings. We can't predict the future, we shouldn't worry ourselves into a frenzy about what's been done in the past. All we know for sure is that it's Now, and what we do what we can do, slowly getting by the day and understanding the mission we will soon hold. Great thoughts- loved how honest you were in this piece too, made me consider a lot also.

Keep writing,
MaryAnne

I like this very creative

The past is a burden
that blinds you to the Now
Why worry, when nothing
can be done?
Why despond, when the song
has been sung

The best one:)

I liked your poem and one thing..the thought wasn't original and I can understand it as you are new to this theme..life in terms of writing as you said...
And as your first attempt,I found it good and you would improve as you write more poems in this jonar...overall a good poem...I liked it...:))

Great piece.

The message you wanted to portray is just to worry about the present, don't worry about the past, or the future for we don't know what may come ahead, and the past is the like the word explains in the past.

I do agree about not worrying about them but as long as we don't forget about our past for there are a few things that we can get from it to help us take better decisions and actions in the present and the future will be base on what we do in the present thus due worry about your actions in it for our future is depends on them.

Good piece.

I love the way its written:) this is the 1st time for me to read ur writing, and I love wut I read:)
Ofc a 5/5 from me

This poem does not need critiquing. I loved it! I really liked how u opened this poem stating u can't see the future, then u listed what u could see which were your feelings. Very interesting. I also love when a poems title is included in the poem and it was a good final statement!

Oh! I wanted to say I also loved "the past is a burden that blinds you to the now". That was awesome

I like it very much, and it embodies a pretty good philosophy, in fact not letting the past affect me is something that i need to get better at. So yeah, the message is good.

Sometimes it almost seemed like you had to choose between rhyming and flow, but honestly I'm not the best at either of those, maybe a little bit of tweaking but honestly thats just being nitpicky, over all i liked it quite a lot.

It got the intended message across, succinctly, and without breaking the reader's focus. well done

Why worry, when nothing
can be done?
^
I really loved this part. While I was reading, it was like this part just hit me, like it was talking just to me.

I love the message and free-spiritedness in this poem. Great job!

Cayce

I love your work, i get lost reading it, its not just how you write it, it's what you are writing, you are an amazing and talented writer, you can tell that your not just gifted, but you actually feel each and every emotion in your poems, true poets. :).
take care
xxkimxx

Great poem. i really like how it ended. i really dont know what else to say other than your writing impresses me. whatever thats worth to you. great job. keep up the excellent work

Very well written I would agree with the fact that far too many people allow their past to cripple their future. Life should always be lived from day to day. Great Job!