I"m strangelyl drawn to this poem. I've read it a couple times now...its just so abstract, but at the same time it makes perfect sense . I'm bewildered but curious and the poem seems to offer plenty of room for mental exploration. I think my brain just melted...thanks for sharing
8 years ago
Yes I agree with the above about this piece being so abstract. I too have read it many times (and even begged a friend of mine to read it) we both said to each other that it was very well written, and intruguing, as well as so very creative. It is a fabulous write and I think you have penned a piece of perfection.
8 years ago
I don't know exactly what the author intended to portray in this short but well written piece.
All I know is that I can read it many times and still love it.
This is the way, I interpreted this piece.
That the acidic revelations are the secrets that are sharp tasting our sour to the author. They became clearer when they dance upon crystal as they captured the memories that were frozen but they sort of melted with all the heat from the dancing. "Let me taste it softly" Like let me see them and remember them, silently so that the spirit from the authors head will still remember them.
This piece is just intriguing and captivating. Also like the above comments abstract.
Well as I'm not very good at this commenting business I'm going to have to agree with all of the above comments, especially cyder73 who said (s)he was 'beweildered but curious'. I'm going to write this down on a piece of paper and put into my pocket to study now.....its got my imagination antennas tingling! Well done...=)
8 years ago
Honestly, when I saw that this won, I was like.. what the hell? why? :p
Let's face it, some short poems are so amazingly written, I love the last two lines a lot.. so congrats on all levels :)
Such a short piece,but so evocative. The emotion in this is unbelievable some people just rock short poetry while others need so much rambling to get their point across, can't find much to say really I keep reading the piece and I keep on falling in love with it..
"so the ghosts in my head
will not die of hunger"
I never knew ghost could eat..that phrase has me in a trance, I honestly wish it was mine..
I'm a little bewildered as to the meaning but gosh the word choice and the way you have combined it all has made it a masterpiece!!
My interpretation of it was that the ghosts represented the past or past mistakes - like skeletons in the closet - just differently worded i guess.. And you feed them 'acidic revelations' possibly drugs or lies in order to placate them or how you have worded it 'Will not die of hunger'. The 'taste it softly' sort of helps with this theory but could - and probably does - imply more/ differently. As well as 'silently' because drug use would usually be kept private or secret - not that I'm implying anything.. Really I'm not!! 'frozen memory' line I think also suggests the past - like a photograph.. Because the image is frozen in time as a memory forever. Just my interpretation though.
Wow, I am not surprised this won. What amazes me is how you can group together such a small amount of words but yet create a big scene with them. The imagery is fantastic and it leaves room for interpretation depending on what way you want to read this. For me it was like representing mental health issue's and the affect it can have on you. The ghosts in your head could perhaps be related to schizophrenia. There are so many ways to look at this. It makes me wonder what you had in your mind when you wrote this, or if it was just the way the words came out.