Fallen kite

I like the way you described life and love with the kite as a metaphor--

We allowed for our wishes to soar
like flying a kite, just without cord;
wanted to grab them later on,
but grasped at nothing.

The first stanza is very meaningful and I can picture out the scene or the imagery you're trying to convey. It's like--the persona's dream with her love one soaring in the sky..they aim high that someday they will catch it but unfortunately it fly against the wind and subside into the ground.

I still wonder why we have fallen silent
and whether there is even something
to hold onto.

Very emotional part--yeah, like a kite there's instances that we take down by the wind and no one catch us when we fall down...

Our sky is overclouded;
the horizon is barely more than a stripe
in the vast, desolate landscape
rather than a sight line; nothing apart from that.

This part portrays to my mind about the life's burden or we say the challenges in our love life...
"Our sky is overclouded"--the more your love/life stay longer the more things were complicated. I like the brilliant imagery.

Yet I feel smaller than my reflection
because you took the wind out of my sails
and my home is no longer my harbour.

Nice ending. I enjoy reading the whole piece. Really amazing and written in subtle way:)
5/5-C

Yeah it is good all of your poems so far seem to be about love of some description. your wording is good and your structure. the feeling is there but to be honest there is a sense of monotony or a vagueness. repetitive love becomes obnoxious. however i have only read three of your poems so far. looking forward to reading your other work.

I really like this poem, emotionally written and a collective use of phrases to stitch this poem, great job =)

I feel smaller than my reflection -diminished,insignificant ? A cold smile ..........is the love gone ?perhaps it was not strong enough .........

Hi you hit a emotion and tears are floating on my cheeks, nice work but hard to read without emotions
br
ole