She smiles a bit lost
"I only know that it's expected, that I want to reach it..
it seems worthy of pursuit.", unconsciously fixing her hair.
"Even short hair can be feminine" she almost asks apologetic.
Her thoughts revolve around stereotypes and how fighting them
causes you to be perceived as feminist. Inferiority complexes
are not justified while advertisements ask for pure skin and
even skinnier legs, so you too fit into those jeans.
She complains about several beauty competitions,
but doesn't miss a single one. "I enjoy being part
of the gender that represents beauty" she says,
"even if I am not always best at it."
The gentle laugh, that follows, lights up the room and
her missing options settle in the dusk.
I liked the different style of this poem .. Very different and with so many ways to interpret it .. Your way of writing captures the reader from the beginning ..
Yes we should be proud to be women
Wow, this is AMAZING, I have always been one to open my big mouth when it comes to women were never treated fairly. So this really touched me, it really minded me of how happy I am and proud to be a women. All women are great!!
9 years ago
by Wicked Ways
This is so true for today's society. . . but I've gotta say the ending was perfection. . I love the use of "gentle laugh"
I love the title too drew me in and this poem is definitely sophisticated enough for its standards :) lol its a perfect title
This poem has a very modern, casual style. It's something new and different, which is always nice to encounter.
The way you wrote this, with the quotes, kind of reminds me of a reality show, or a commercial. When they'd focus the camera on one person and then she says a line or two, complete with sparkly eyes and gorgeous smile, usually about how the product has benefitted them or something, and then the viewer gets to see some random images of the product again. Can you imagine what I'm talking about? I find it hard to explain lol.
I really liked the way this poem was constructed. Starting with such a simple, straightforward question, then including some quotes, squeezing some movements in between, and even some inner thoughts of the spectator/interviewer.
I also liked how the title was a generalisation in itself, since it lacks an adjective, it means you're not pointing at a certain group of women, but really just all women.
The ending to me seems like the spectator feels sympathy, as he/she sees something that's so much more worth loving than merely superficial feminity. That gentle laugh, honest and lacking arrogance. Seems fitting for an ending. Camera lights out. ;)